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azuriteI haven't done review replies in a while, and you might think that because I have the ability to use FFnet's new Review Reply option, I would take advantage of it. However, the thing with the FFnet Review Reply is that they are private, not posted anywhere on the site. With these, not only can you see which reviews I took special notice of, but which ones asked pertinent enough questions for me to answer. As always, keep your eyes peeled for interesting information or secret spoilers!
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A Devil in Heaven -- I luv this chapter! I don't mind that its short at all! But why was Tea fainting so much? Update! ^_^!
Why, indeed? ^_~ Read on and find out!
The Samurai Pizza Cat -- oh wow. it happened again ... no i dont mean the ball, although i DO mean the ball in a way :P i mean i was listening to a song that finished at the perfect time along with the story. this time it was mellon collie and the infinite sadness by smashing pumpkins, with you may or may not know is an instrumental which does not really relate very much to its name, but is beautifully uplifting and poignant at the same time ... just like this chapter. this STORY altogether actually. the previous time i refer to, when i listen to a song that finished perfectly on time, is when i listened, at your request, to boulevard of broken dreams by green day to your one-shot I walk alone. it also finished at the perfect time. perfect timing is a talent of yours.
samurai. xo
Thank you! I'm not big on songfics so much anymore, but I do have to admit that songs play an "instrumental" role (har har, pardon the pun) in how some of my chapters come out. Certain chapters of WDKY almost have "theme songs" in a sense. I'm always on the prowl for more "Seto x Anzu" themed songs, and I did download Mellon Collie and the Infinite Sadness; my late sister used to listen to the Smashing Pumpkins all the time, and I was pleased to find that it not only fit as you said, but it was a fantastic song!
Thanks for your review!
winterwing3000 -- I'd just love to get over there to Cal and give you a big hug right now! This chapter was sweet and cute. Especially when Seto was fretting over the White Day's preparation! Bwha~
Oh, and Chieko brings up another mystery that ties Seto to her. If her fiancee's one of Seto's relation, then they'll be family. x.X What a small world. And I can't feel but to have a hunch that Bakura's going to be thrown into this as well. Tea really learnt her lesson well... never mess with someone's past. Last time was scary enough. But hopefully, Seto's going to need someone to lean on and she will be there. More fluffy goodiness! XD
Even though the chapter was short, it was a great reading. The Tokyo Tower scene is an A++! Just don't know why she fainted though, maybe lack of oxygen in such a high up place? (Or Bakura's stalking them and decided to steal some of her life force... ^^;;) Anyways, will be waiting for Chapter 22! 14 more chapters and then it will be CO7!! Whhe!!
Ah, finally someone catches onto the whole relation thing! I suppose there's no use in keeping in secret anymore, since I've only been hinting at it since chapter 7! But the past, "messing with it" and of course, Bakura are all coming along for the ride! :D However, Seto and Téa were never at Tokyo Tower-- have you been watching a bit too much "Magic Knights Rayearth" lately? ^_~ They were at the Maple Hotel (another homage to "Hana Yori Dango"), dancing the night away-- up until Téa fainted. Considering the hotel is only 30 or so stories, I doubt it was high enough for her to faint. Remember when Téa fainted in her duel with Mai, too? These are all HINTS! Keep your eyes peeled as the story and the mystery continues to unravel!
mischiefmagnet -- Aw. I knew Seto had it in him to be romantic. That was pretty sweet, arranging all that for Téa. I also knew he was probably smart enough to figure out what was bothering her at school on Valentine's Day!
I noticed one thing that you might want to go back and take a look at (wouldn't be surprised if I'm not the first person to mention this). When Téa is talking to Chieko about Jacques Mode and she thinks about who knows the truth concerning her parents' deaths, you mentioned a Sergeant Hiroma. You meant Sergeant Konami, didn't you? (panics) Unless I've completely flipped and have no idea what's going on anymore!! Thought I'd mention it, just in case.
Thanks for letting me know about that. Anytime someone reviews with mistakes like that, I always fix them immediately. I also tend to re-read my chapters (I'm re-reading Ch. 20 now, as I write these review replies, even though I just posted Chapter 22!) and find mistakes that I either didn't know about before, or that I thought I corrected!
Anyhow, I am extremely perplexed and curious about Téa's little fainting fit during Seto's White Day surprise. What's up with that? (ponder ponder) Well, obviously she's not pregnant, unless this is the immaculate conception. Haha! On a similar note, I wonder what kind of...advice Téa might end up getting from Mai? > : )
HAH! Seto is GOD! *cough* Kidding, kidding.
I was really surprised to see you update so quickly! I didn't even have to go back and re-read the previous chapter. (giggles) I find it hard to believe that people ever complain about you writing a short chapter. I mean, compared to the ones I often write, this chapter is practically War and Peace (haha ask Seto about that, eh?). I can't wait to see what happens next!
The thing is, I don't update according to page count-- because I type all my chapters in HTML, where pages aren't calculated. Also, depending on someone's settings, the text in the chapter might appear bigger or smaller, which would obviously affect the page count. I type according to KB size, and I know once I hit 80 to 90K, it's pretty long. But the reason why chapter 7 had to be split up into two parts (thus forever screwing up my chapter count on all sites) is because it was nearly 300K! So there's your gauge of chapter length... I tend to waver between REALLY short (for me) and REALLY long (for anybody). It all depends on "writing to length" -- that is, writing until I feel the chapter's done. Let people complain all they want; it's how the story must be told. I hated cutting Chapter 7 into 2 parts. :P
Thanks for reviewing! *super mad red blush*
panmotto -- I liked this chapter! At least Tea was disappointed with the plan for White Day that Seto had planned out. Please update asap!
You mean wasn't disappointed, right? At least, that's how I wrote Téa in this chapter! :O
unknown reviewer -- While searching the site last night I was only checking the story out of habit. Considering the normal lenght of your chapters I didn't really expect an update. Lo and behold I found one.
But my joy was short lived however, for the time was late and I had a college paper to write. But what happend when I looked the next morning, another update!! You really know how to spoil your readers, and rip their hearts out as well...both admirable qualities.
o_O You make me sound more like a Bakura-esque mass murderer than a fic writer! Eep. Should I be proud?
The first point I would like to make about the two chapters is the lenghts. While not quite as long as many of your others they still feel far longer than many other fics. And as for the quality of the writing, I said it before: you could post a paragraph update and I would still end up praising your writing.
On to the actual plot for chp 19. At first Tea's shower might seem a bit OOC, but after re-reading some of your earlier chapters (trying to find your little hints) readers can see that it really does work out. Seto's reaction was absolutly perfect, completly stunned and having no idea what to do. While reading that I imagined myself in that situation (I wish) and figured it would be the exact same thing, deer caught in headlights, do anything but actually look at the person. Anyway, then after all that buildup, she sneezes and the moment is ruined. Absolutly perfect.
Aah, yeah, I still get a great kick of laughter and satisfaction. I can imagine all these people excited just to have the update. They get to reading, and it's surprisingly steamy! And then it ends up being like a balloon deflating in front of your face-- I inserted a moment of pure "cute and stupid" and I've got you grinning and gritting for more! :D
I hold a special place in my heart for chapter 20. I particurally like because it demonstrates that despite everything that has happened, all the changes in his life, Seto Kaiba is still Seto Kaiba. He still plans everything out, he is still pays carefull attension to details. Of course his planning has slightly more noble objectives this time. Nice idea to re-serve that entire room for just the two of them, it pays to have a billionair boyfriend I suppose. Then the fainting part, I have to wonder...was it really something so simple as fainting. Or perhapse something else is going on, perhapse connected with Tea's problems in summoning the Blue Eyes Ultimate Dragon? Also, can't wait to get to this storyline involving Seto's biological family, if that is indeed the family Chieko speaks of...with you I can never be to sure.
Another person who is catching on to my many secret hints! Keep your spyglass out, you'll need it for future chapters!
Anyway, as usual you have made this day special for me with your updates. The chapters, though shorter, were just as well writen as ever. Glad to see Bakura is finally getting back into the picture and is ready to collect on that deal. After all of this fluff I can saftly say I'm ready for a bit more action and angst. Can't wait.
Sincerely,
THE UNKNOWN REVIEWER
Thanks so much for your lengthy and eye-opening reviews. I hope to keep hearing from you as the story continues, no matter how whack the story/my writing gets. :P
dream-fantasy10 -- that has got to be your single most fastest update...ever. BRAVO!! *applaudes loudly*
whoa, what happened to Tea? very dramatic and sweet, lovin' it =)
that necklace sounds so beautiful, i could clearly imagine the sparkling diamonds in the rows, very pretty.
keep up the good work, can't wait for those new plots!!
until next time.
The necklace is actually loosely based off what was ORIGINALLY a belt, but I intentionally broke it and turned one half into a necklace, and the other half into a choker. Téa's necklace is based off of my choker. Too bad I couldn't design it on some jewelry site and show it off to everyone, so they really get a good visual of how much Seto spoils her when he really wants to!
Thanks for reviewing, and I hope you keep reading!
roguele_beau -- I've said it before and I'll say it again, you rock! You made my week, two postings in such a sort time, yea! Story still rocks, can't wait to see what happens next ^u^
BTW have you considered actually publishing your work? You really are very talented and I think you would have a chance.
Either way, keep up the amazing work!
^^ Thank you. It's rare that I tend to finish 2 chapters in such a short time, or that I can get them beta'd that fast... it'll be especially tough for future chapters, as the holidays end and people go back to school or work. Nonetheless, I'm going to keep going until the story is DONE DONE DONE!
As for publishing, you're one of many people to say that! While it would be morally and legally wrong to publish fanfiction, one day I do hope to write some fiction stories of my own (there are some itty bitty, rather old samples up on FictionPress.Com). In the meantime, fanfics, essays, rants, and journalism articles are my main outlet. Thanks so much for your review!
yoursolastsummer -- I am loving the quick updates and the last chapter was wonderful. This chapter started out really good but I have to admit that it kinda fell apart at the end (oh please don't hate me for saying that). What Seto did for White Day was wonderful, I loved that part but when Tea passed out -Twice, wouldn't he have taken her to a hospital or something. Seto is a smart man and he would realize that something has to be wrong. Ok enough of that-all in all i still totally love this story! Please update soon.
Matter of taste, I guess. When someone faints, I'd say the first reaction isn't to bring someone to the hospital. I would know, if only because my mom used to have fainting spells all the time. There's a reason why first aid kits have smelling salts in them, or why in movies, you see people either slap (eek! bad idea) or splash cold water on people that have fallen unconscious. In any case, since Téa is otherwise a hale and healthy girl, Seto wouldn't associate her fainting with some other sickness, or anything that would need to be checked out by the hospital. Likely, he'd make sure she was eating right and not menstruating, since those are the two main reasons why girls would randomly faint (this coming from someone who knows about feeling faint and WISHING she could faint on cue). Not to ruin the plot, but Téa's fainting is not medical. There's a special reason why it occurs, and when. Keep your eyes peeled for the details!
Nachzes Black-Rider -- Oh, pish posh! That's not a short chapter! It's a perfectly nice length. Unless you're planning on making this into a fanfiction novel...
Yeah. My longest chapter is 20 pages long. I suck.
-.-;
Great chapter - update soon!
-gasps- What EVER could be wrong with Tea, though...?
No, you don't suck! I just don't know how to shut up! I can justify myself for fanfiction, saying I'm writing to length; here, I don't have editors saying "We don't have enough space for you to write that much, cut this and this and that out!" like you do for essays in school, or articles in journalism. I do have betas that tell me if I'm being redundant, but most of the time, I drop so many little hints in every paragraph or bit of dialogue, nothing can really be cut without sacrificing some part of the story! But I have gotten railed on for not being able to stop myself sooner. I enjoy shorter chapters, if only because it keeps people on the edge of their seat, regardless of how the chapter actually ends!
You're probably the umpteenth person to worry about what's up with Téa. I'm glad I did such a good job calling attention to it! :D Bwahah.
xxSassyActressxx -- why did Tea faint? Is she sick? Was she drugged? Tell me SOON! *hops in impationt-ness*
*laughs* Don't give me any new ideas! Thanks for reviewing, though~!
xx Painful Bliss xx -- Aww...that was so sweet!
Too bad there isn't a White Day here in America. People just take valentines and don't say thank you. Bastards...lol.
Update soon!
xx Painful Bliss xx
I hope that if I study abroad in Japan like I plan, people will give me chocolates and cards on White Day! I've never been one for Valentine's in the States, but that's only because I've rarely gotten anything. ;_; *sniffle* But thank you for reviewing nonetheless. Now to bury my sorrows in chocolate...
Mamono -- I read this last night, and absolutely needed to. This was Perfect. The Anniversary Ball was already near and dear to my heart... to have it recreated?? WHO!
When the Hiromas were mentioned... that was just the best hint of another spin to this story. You're halfway through and yet it seems like the story's only just beginning! And, for some odd reason, how you wrote Seto being tense when his relatives were mentioned... just made me love him all the more. :)
Back to the ball... wonderful idea for a White Day gift. I was in fluff land until... SHE FAINTED. Had it not been late, I would have yelled aloud instead of hissed at the paper and threw it down on my lap. (It's been so long, and I'm still hooked on all levels to this story.)
:) Hoorah for you!
--On a side note, I came across a Full Metal Alchemist Fanfiction that was published and being sold... I think you should look into your options with WDKY. *nod* (I can provide cover art!)
YAAAAAAAAAAAAAY for the best betas being hooked to the story still! And here I thought you guys were getting bored of me! ;_; I seem to be getting good at getting "Awww... ARGH!" reactions from readers nowadays, though! So much fluff or steam, and then BOMP! Sorry folks, show's over, but here's a big surprise of PLOT to tide you over! Or something like that, anyway.
O_O But what's this with an FMA fic being sold? I think I asked you about this before, and it ended up being something different, but who knows-- I could be imagining things. I'm good at that. o_o I still want cover art, though! :O And these later chapters have so many fanart-worthy moments, I just wish I were better at drawing!
DarkShadowFlame -- Aw, the sweetness isn't even overshadowed by the fact that Tea fainted! Although now I am going to bring that up and go back to cooing about the sweetness later. Why did Tea faint? It reminds me of the dizziness she experienced with the Blue Eyes. Gah, I want to know what's going on so badly! I love this story!
Bwahaa, another detective in the making! Then again, I should have expected it from you, DSF! You're on the right track-- keep at it.
I also love Seto's firm decision: No Ghosts on White Day. And that's final, damn you, ghosts!
Like he could go to a temple and get some sort of ward, and tack it onto himself, the car, Téa's back... etc. Heh.
Mokuba surrounded by fangirls. Aw, how cute.
And now Chieko's fiancee might end up being a new part of the story! Where the heck is this gonna lead? I admit I first read this last week, so I also went back and reread some earlier chapters, but there's a lot to remember. Hopefully you'll be as good about refreshing our memory as you normally are. ^^; In this reread I noticed you fixed Konami's name, lol... Anyway, you left off at a tantalizing part. None of the characters made any reference to the Hiromas after Chieko's sentence trailed away... hmm, hopefully it won't take too long to get to this new mystery!
These two chapters were awesome (yay). I love that you updated so fast. I'm rooting for your continued inspiration so I can read more (these aren't selfish motives at all, no!). Ciao!
-DSF-
Some things I intentionally had to begin here, but alas, you might not see a real conclusion until Circle of Seven. That's my curse, for getting so involved in this saga that I planned a sequel when I wasn't even finished with the fourth chapter! But at least you'll have a better idea of what to expect by the time that rolls around. Maybe I should write a guidebook or Reader's Club edition? Heh. Anywho, thanks again for continuing to read and review! It really makes my day! ^^
Ambiance-Dream -- This was the sweetest chapter ever written for Seto and Téa that I've ever read in a very very long time.
Oh, BTW, I was just wondering, but what did Téa get for Seto for Valentine's Day? I didn't really catch that; I must have missed it. -__- Sorry.
It was briefly mentioned in one sentence; an intricately designed (handmade) card, and a fresh batch of Duel Monsters cookies.
Seto is such a sweetie to Téa. I mean, he rented the whole building and prepared everything to revive the night of the Ball. Tha is just SO romantic. *swoon*
*twitch* Must... Restrain... Self... From... Ranting about... How good this chapter... Is!... Must... Stop Self...No Long... Review... This time!...
I was really worried about Téa at first, because she fainted and all... I really hope there isni't a deeper meaning to this that will come up in the future chapters, but chances are that it probably will.
But of course! Bwahah! Since when is anything ever simple with me?
The ending was so sweet. I love this part:
“But above all else, she looked happy, and that was what counted.
"Happy White Day, Téa."
Those were the last words she heard before she melted into Seto's arms and he carried her upstairs.”
It warms my heart soo much... And that's not the first time that your writing has done that. Definitely not the first time. I just LOVE this story so much... It's really affected me, actually. Once again, good job!! *^-^* Ja ne!
Thanks. I used to think that the only thing I was good at writing was that teeth-rotting fluff, but I think my tastes in reading and my abilities in writing have improved some, so I can balance out the teeth-rot with some mystery, some angst, and some smexy steam! Thanks for reviewing again and letting me know what you thought! :D
Note: I do not post all reviews that I receive here; only the ones that I feel I should reply to. For all reviews, I do NOT edit them for content/spelling/etc. in any way.
For lengthier reviews, I will insert my commentary where appropriate. The actual review will resume in italicized text.
If more reviews come in for this (or any older) chapter(s), then I will respond to them at the BOTTOM of this page, and indicate a “last updated” section here at the TOP. If there is no LAST UPDATED area, that means this post has not changed since the original post date.
A Devil in Heaven -- I luv this chapter! I don't mind that its short at all! But why was Tea fainting so much? Update! ^_^!
Why, indeed? ^_~ Read on and find out!
The Samurai Pizza Cat -- oh wow. it happened again ... no i dont mean the ball, although i DO mean the ball in a way :P i mean i was listening to a song that finished at the perfect time along with the story. this time it was mellon collie and the infinite sadness by smashing pumpkins, with you may or may not know is an instrumental which does not really relate very much to its name, but is beautifully uplifting and poignant at the same time ... just like this chapter. this STORY altogether actually. the previous time i refer to, when i listen to a song that finished perfectly on time, is when i listened, at your request, to boulevard of broken dreams by green day to your one-shot I walk alone. it also finished at the perfect time. perfect timing is a talent of yours.
samurai. xo
Thank you! I'm not big on songfics so much anymore, but I do have to admit that songs play an "instrumental" role (har har, pardon the pun) in how some of my chapters come out. Certain chapters of WDKY almost have "theme songs" in a sense. I'm always on the prowl for more "Seto x Anzu" themed songs, and I did download Mellon Collie and the Infinite Sadness; my late sister used to listen to the Smashing Pumpkins all the time, and I was pleased to find that it not only fit as you said, but it was a fantastic song!
Thanks for your review!
winterwing3000 -- I'd just love to get over there to Cal and give you a big hug right now! This chapter was sweet and cute. Especially when Seto was fretting over the White Day's preparation! Bwha~
Oh, and Chieko brings up another mystery that ties Seto to her. If her fiancee's one of Seto's relation, then they'll be family. x.X What a small world. And I can't feel but to have a hunch that Bakura's going to be thrown into this as well. Tea really learnt her lesson well... never mess with someone's past. Last time was scary enough. But hopefully, Seto's going to need someone to lean on and she will be there. More fluffy goodiness! XD
Even though the chapter was short, it was a great reading. The Tokyo Tower scene is an A++! Just don't know why she fainted though, maybe lack of oxygen in such a high up place? (Or Bakura's stalking them and decided to steal some of her life force... ^^;;) Anyways, will be waiting for Chapter 22! 14 more chapters and then it will be CO7!! Whhe!!
Ah, finally someone catches onto the whole relation thing! I suppose there's no use in keeping in secret anymore, since I've only been hinting at it since chapter 7! But the past, "messing with it" and of course, Bakura are all coming along for the ride! :D However, Seto and Téa were never at Tokyo Tower-- have you been watching a bit too much "Magic Knights Rayearth" lately? ^_~ They were at the Maple Hotel (another homage to "Hana Yori Dango"), dancing the night away-- up until Téa fainted. Considering the hotel is only 30 or so stories, I doubt it was high enough for her to faint. Remember when Téa fainted in her duel with Mai, too? These are all HINTS! Keep your eyes peeled as the story and the mystery continues to unravel!
mischiefmagnet -- Aw. I knew Seto had it in him to be romantic. That was pretty sweet, arranging all that for Téa. I also knew he was probably smart enough to figure out what was bothering her at school on Valentine's Day!
I noticed one thing that you might want to go back and take a look at (wouldn't be surprised if I'm not the first person to mention this). When Téa is talking to Chieko about Jacques Mode and she thinks about who knows the truth concerning her parents' deaths, you mentioned a Sergeant Hiroma. You meant Sergeant Konami, didn't you? (panics) Unless I've completely flipped and have no idea what's going on anymore!! Thought I'd mention it, just in case.
Thanks for letting me know about that. Anytime someone reviews with mistakes like that, I always fix them immediately. I also tend to re-read my chapters (I'm re-reading Ch. 20 now, as I write these review replies, even though I just posted Chapter 22!) and find mistakes that I either didn't know about before, or that I thought I corrected!
Anyhow, I am extremely perplexed and curious about Téa's little fainting fit during Seto's White Day surprise. What's up with that? (ponder ponder) Well, obviously she's not pregnant, unless this is the immaculate conception. Haha! On a similar note, I wonder what kind of...advice Téa might end up getting from Mai? > : )
HAH! Seto is GOD! *cough* Kidding, kidding.
I was really surprised to see you update so quickly! I didn't even have to go back and re-read the previous chapter. (giggles) I find it hard to believe that people ever complain about you writing a short chapter. I mean, compared to the ones I often write, this chapter is practically War and Peace (haha ask Seto about that, eh?). I can't wait to see what happens next!
The thing is, I don't update according to page count-- because I type all my chapters in HTML, where pages aren't calculated. Also, depending on someone's settings, the text in the chapter might appear bigger or smaller, which would obviously affect the page count. I type according to KB size, and I know once I hit 80 to 90K, it's pretty long. But the reason why chapter 7 had to be split up into two parts (thus forever screwing up my chapter count on all sites) is because it was nearly 300K! So there's your gauge of chapter length... I tend to waver between REALLY short (for me) and REALLY long (for anybody). It all depends on "writing to length" -- that is, writing until I feel the chapter's done. Let people complain all they want; it's how the story must be told. I hated cutting Chapter 7 into 2 parts. :P
Thanks for reviewing! *super mad red blush*
panmotto -- I liked this chapter! At least Tea was disappointed with the plan for White Day that Seto had planned out. Please update asap!
You mean wasn't disappointed, right? At least, that's how I wrote Téa in this chapter! :O
unknown reviewer -- While searching the site last night I was only checking the story out of habit. Considering the normal lenght of your chapters I didn't really expect an update. Lo and behold I found one.
But my joy was short lived however, for the time was late and I had a college paper to write. But what happend when I looked the next morning, another update!! You really know how to spoil your readers, and rip their hearts out as well...both admirable qualities.
o_O You make me sound more like a Bakura-esque mass murderer than a fic writer! Eep. Should I be proud?
The first point I would like to make about the two chapters is the lenghts. While not quite as long as many of your others they still feel far longer than many other fics. And as for the quality of the writing, I said it before: you could post a paragraph update and I would still end up praising your writing.
On to the actual plot for chp 19. At first Tea's shower might seem a bit OOC, but after re-reading some of your earlier chapters (trying to find your little hints) readers can see that it really does work out. Seto's reaction was absolutly perfect, completly stunned and having no idea what to do. While reading that I imagined myself in that situation (I wish) and figured it would be the exact same thing, deer caught in headlights, do anything but actually look at the person. Anyway, then after all that buildup, she sneezes and the moment is ruined. Absolutly perfect.
Aah, yeah, I still get a great kick of laughter and satisfaction. I can imagine all these people excited just to have the update. They get to reading, and it's surprisingly steamy! And then it ends up being like a balloon deflating in front of your face-- I inserted a moment of pure "cute and stupid" and I've got you grinning and gritting for more! :D
I hold a special place in my heart for chapter 20. I particurally like because it demonstrates that despite everything that has happened, all the changes in his life, Seto Kaiba is still Seto Kaiba. He still plans everything out, he is still pays carefull attension to details. Of course his planning has slightly more noble objectives this time. Nice idea to re-serve that entire room for just the two of them, it pays to have a billionair boyfriend I suppose. Then the fainting part, I have to wonder...was it really something so simple as fainting. Or perhapse something else is going on, perhapse connected with Tea's problems in summoning the Blue Eyes Ultimate Dragon? Also, can't wait to get to this storyline involving Seto's biological family, if that is indeed the family Chieko speaks of...with you I can never be to sure.
Another person who is catching on to my many secret hints! Keep your spyglass out, you'll need it for future chapters!
Anyway, as usual you have made this day special for me with your updates. The chapters, though shorter, were just as well writen as ever. Glad to see Bakura is finally getting back into the picture and is ready to collect on that deal. After all of this fluff I can saftly say I'm ready for a bit more action and angst. Can't wait.
Sincerely,
THE UNKNOWN REVIEWER
Thanks so much for your lengthy and eye-opening reviews. I hope to keep hearing from you as the story continues, no matter how whack the story/my writing gets. :P
dream-fantasy10 -- that has got to be your single most fastest update...ever. BRAVO!! *applaudes loudly*
whoa, what happened to Tea? very dramatic and sweet, lovin' it =)
that necklace sounds so beautiful, i could clearly imagine the sparkling diamonds in the rows, very pretty.
keep up the good work, can't wait for those new plots!!
until next time.
The necklace is actually loosely based off what was ORIGINALLY a belt, but I intentionally broke it and turned one half into a necklace, and the other half into a choker. Téa's necklace is based off of my choker. Too bad I couldn't design it on some jewelry site and show it off to everyone, so they really get a good visual of how much Seto spoils her when he really wants to!
Thanks for reviewing, and I hope you keep reading!
roguele_beau -- I've said it before and I'll say it again, you rock! You made my week, two postings in such a sort time, yea! Story still rocks, can't wait to see what happens next ^u^
BTW have you considered actually publishing your work? You really are very talented and I think you would have a chance.
Either way, keep up the amazing work!
^^ Thank you. It's rare that I tend to finish 2 chapters in such a short time, or that I can get them beta'd that fast... it'll be especially tough for future chapters, as the holidays end and people go back to school or work. Nonetheless, I'm going to keep going until the story is DONE DONE DONE!
As for publishing, you're one of many people to say that! While it would be morally and legally wrong to publish fanfiction, one day I do hope to write some fiction stories of my own (there are some itty bitty, rather old samples up on FictionPress.Com). In the meantime, fanfics, essays, rants, and journalism articles are my main outlet. Thanks so much for your review!
yoursolastsummer -- I am loving the quick updates and the last chapter was wonderful. This chapter started out really good but I have to admit that it kinda fell apart at the end (oh please don't hate me for saying that). What Seto did for White Day was wonderful, I loved that part but when Tea passed out -Twice, wouldn't he have taken her to a hospital or something. Seto is a smart man and he would realize that something has to be wrong. Ok enough of that-all in all i still totally love this story! Please update soon.
Matter of taste, I guess. When someone faints, I'd say the first reaction isn't to bring someone to the hospital. I would know, if only because my mom used to have fainting spells all the time. There's a reason why first aid kits have smelling salts in them, or why in movies, you see people either slap (eek! bad idea) or splash cold water on people that have fallen unconscious. In any case, since Téa is otherwise a hale and healthy girl, Seto wouldn't associate her fainting with some other sickness, or anything that would need to be checked out by the hospital. Likely, he'd make sure she was eating right and not menstruating, since those are the two main reasons why girls would randomly faint (this coming from someone who knows about feeling faint and WISHING she could faint on cue). Not to ruin the plot, but Téa's fainting is not medical. There's a special reason why it occurs, and when. Keep your eyes peeled for the details!
Nachzes Black-Rider -- Oh, pish posh! That's not a short chapter! It's a perfectly nice length. Unless you're planning on making this into a fanfiction novel...
Yeah. My longest chapter is 20 pages long. I suck.
-.-;
Great chapter - update soon!
-gasps- What EVER could be wrong with Tea, though...?
No, you don't suck! I just don't know how to shut up! I can justify myself for fanfiction, saying I'm writing to length; here, I don't have editors saying "We don't have enough space for you to write that much, cut this and this and that out!" like you do for essays in school, or articles in journalism. I do have betas that tell me if I'm being redundant, but most of the time, I drop so many little hints in every paragraph or bit of dialogue, nothing can really be cut without sacrificing some part of the story! But I have gotten railed on for not being able to stop myself sooner. I enjoy shorter chapters, if only because it keeps people on the edge of their seat, regardless of how the chapter actually ends!
You're probably the umpteenth person to worry about what's up with Téa. I'm glad I did such a good job calling attention to it! :D Bwahah.
xxSassyActressxx -- why did Tea faint? Is she sick? Was she drugged? Tell me SOON! *hops in impationt-ness*
*laughs* Don't give me any new ideas! Thanks for reviewing, though~!
xx Painful Bliss xx -- Aww...that was so sweet!
Too bad there isn't a White Day here in America. People just take valentines and don't say thank you. Bastards...lol.
Update soon!
xx Painful Bliss xx
I hope that if I study abroad in Japan like I plan, people will give me chocolates and cards on White Day! I've never been one for Valentine's in the States, but that's only because I've rarely gotten anything. ;_; *sniffle* But thank you for reviewing nonetheless. Now to bury my sorrows in chocolate...
Mamono -- I read this last night, and absolutely needed to. This was Perfect. The Anniversary Ball was already near and dear to my heart... to have it recreated?? WHO!
When the Hiromas were mentioned... that was just the best hint of another spin to this story. You're halfway through and yet it seems like the story's only just beginning! And, for some odd reason, how you wrote Seto being tense when his relatives were mentioned... just made me love him all the more. :)
Back to the ball... wonderful idea for a White Day gift. I was in fluff land until... SHE FAINTED. Had it not been late, I would have yelled aloud instead of hissed at the paper and threw it down on my lap. (It's been so long, and I'm still hooked on all levels to this story.)
:) Hoorah for you!
--On a side note, I came across a Full Metal Alchemist Fanfiction that was published and being sold... I think you should look into your options with WDKY. *nod* (I can provide cover art!)
YAAAAAAAAAAAAAY for the best betas being hooked to the story still! And here I thought you guys were getting bored of me! ;_; I seem to be getting good at getting "Awww... ARGH!" reactions from readers nowadays, though! So much fluff or steam, and then BOMP! Sorry folks, show's over, but here's a big surprise of PLOT to tide you over! Or something like that, anyway.
O_O But what's this with an FMA fic being sold? I think I asked you about this before, and it ended up being something different, but who knows-- I could be imagining things. I'm good at that. o_o I still want cover art, though! :O And these later chapters have so many fanart-worthy moments, I just wish I were better at drawing!
DarkShadowFlame -- Aw, the sweetness isn't even overshadowed by the fact that Tea fainted! Although now I am going to bring that up and go back to cooing about the sweetness later. Why did Tea faint? It reminds me of the dizziness she experienced with the Blue Eyes. Gah, I want to know what's going on so badly! I love this story!
Bwahaa, another detective in the making! Then again, I should have expected it from you, DSF! You're on the right track-- keep at it.
I also love Seto's firm decision: No Ghosts on White Day. And that's final, damn you, ghosts!
Like he could go to a temple and get some sort of ward, and tack it onto himself, the car, Téa's back... etc. Heh.
Mokuba surrounded by fangirls. Aw, how cute.
And now Chieko's fiancee might end up being a new part of the story! Where the heck is this gonna lead? I admit I first read this last week, so I also went back and reread some earlier chapters, but there's a lot to remember. Hopefully you'll be as good about refreshing our memory as you normally are. ^^; In this reread I noticed you fixed Konami's name, lol... Anyway, you left off at a tantalizing part. None of the characters made any reference to the Hiromas after Chieko's sentence trailed away... hmm, hopefully it won't take too long to get to this new mystery!
These two chapters were awesome (yay). I love that you updated so fast. I'm rooting for your continued inspiration so I can read more (these aren't selfish motives at all, no!). Ciao!
-DSF-
Some things I intentionally had to begin here, but alas, you might not see a real conclusion until Circle of Seven. That's my curse, for getting so involved in this saga that I planned a sequel when I wasn't even finished with the fourth chapter! But at least you'll have a better idea of what to expect by the time that rolls around. Maybe I should write a guidebook or Reader's Club edition? Heh. Anywho, thanks again for continuing to read and review! It really makes my day! ^^
Ambiance-Dream -- This was the sweetest chapter ever written for Seto and Téa that I've ever read in a very very long time.
Oh, BTW, I was just wondering, but what did Téa get for Seto for Valentine's Day? I didn't really catch that; I must have missed it. -__- Sorry.
It was briefly mentioned in one sentence; an intricately designed (handmade) card, and a fresh batch of Duel Monsters cookies.
Seto is such a sweetie to Téa. I mean, he rented the whole building and prepared everything to revive the night of the Ball. Tha is just SO romantic. *swoon*
*twitch* Must... Restrain... Self... From... Ranting about... How good this chapter... Is!... Must... Stop Self...No Long... Review... This time!...
I was really worried about Téa at first, because she fainted and all... I really hope there isni't a deeper meaning to this that will come up in the future chapters, but chances are that it probably will.
But of course! Bwahah! Since when is anything ever simple with me?
The ending was so sweet. I love this part:
“But above all else, she looked happy, and that was what counted.
"Happy White Day, Téa."
Those were the last words she heard before she melted into Seto's arms and he carried her upstairs.”
It warms my heart soo much... And that's not the first time that your writing has done that. Definitely not the first time. I just LOVE this story so much... It's really affected me, actually. Once again, good job!! *^-^* Ja ne!
Thanks. I used to think that the only thing I was good at writing was that teeth-rotting fluff, but I think my tastes in reading and my abilities in writing have improved some, so I can balance out the teeth-rot with some mystery, some angst, and some smexy steam! Thanks for reviewing again and letting me know what you thought! :D
