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azuriteAs of this posting, WDKY23 is up at Fanfiction.Net and MediaMiner.org. It'll go up at Dragonfayth along with many other chapters soon!
I haven't done review replies in a while, and you might think that because I have the ability to use FFnet's new Review Reply option, I would take advantage of it. However, the thing with the FFnet Review Reply is that they are private, not posted anywhere on the site. With these, not only can you see which reviews I took special notice of, but which ones asked pertinent enough questions for me to answer. As always, keep your eyes peeled for interesting information or secret spoilers!
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Nachzes Black-Rider -- Meh.
^^ The only thing I really liked about the YGO movie was the close-ups of Seto's leather-clad legs, and the fact that IF Anubis hadn't come out, he would've trounced Yuugi's sorry ass.
*grin* I found it pretty amusing myself, and it is certainly allowing for me to set the stage for the subplot that I've been waiting to write ever since Chapter 10 or so. The devil (or God?) is in the details, so don't brush off this whole arc just because it's based off the movie! Believe you me, there are VERY important points getting mentioned in this 3-chapter arc! (It finishes with Ch. 24.)
But yeah, you're right-- I always thought Kaiba would have totally won this one, if 'Anubis' hadn't showed up. :P
gladdecease -- Yay for new chappie! Loved the adding in of the movie plotline...and I sort of hope you eventually have the moment that no proper movie-goer could forget. Téa split-kicking the heads off some zombie mummies! XD *loved that part*
Also...
'The same puzzle whom many believe possessed your Millennium Puzzle...'
Perhaps "pharaoh" instead of that first puzzle? The sentence doesn't quite make sense otherwise.
Excellent chapter, once again!
Ahaha, thanks for catching that error! I fixed it. :) I also loved certain scenes in the movie --especially some of Téa's ass-kicking moments, her snarkastic wit, and of course, the banter between Kaiba and Pegasus. Hence, I had a strong motivation to put them (in context) into the WDKY world.
I hope you enjoy this arc and the rest of the story to come!
unknown reviewer -- Before I begin to review this chapter I would like to make something known. I don't really read fan-fiction anymore. I look in any section I'm interested in and all I find that thewritting is rarely middle school level, the characters are not well portrayed, few bother with details unless describing their over the top OC.
But this story...This is something else. I can't stress enough how good you really are. Your clever plot twists, the cliffhangers, the descriptions, and above all the characters make this truely the best fic on the site that I have seen. You characters are far superior to what is on the show. Tea is usually a one trick pony who's no more than a cheerleader, while Seto is the standard rival character with a sympathetic past. You have breathed life in these characters and made them people.
WOW! Thank you very much for the high praise-- I'm glad to know my efforts are not wasted! I know some people get irritated with how detailed I make the story, with all its subplots. Unlike many fics, I really try to develop the characters and situations. I suppose it's my way of injecting "realism" into an otherwise unrealistic universe-- what with magic, monsters, reincarnation, and other things. Then again, who's to say that just because we don't see it on our world, it doesn't exist? ^_~
Now enough rambling about you...It's time to ramble about the chapter.
I saw the YGO Movie on TV so much of the middle was old to me plot wise. However by showing the thoughts that run through the minds of the characters durring these scenes we are able to gain new insights as to whats going on, nicely done. Well done but I hope future chapters take more advantage of the new events...such as the presence of Dartz's gang, Malik and Bakura, oh and Seto and Tea.
I was also glad to see some actual dueling. I rarely ever see decent duels in stories so I welcomed this, despite the fact that movie watchers already knew what was going on move for move. I look forward to some origional duels.
Duels are probably my weak point when it comes to Yu-Gi-Oh fics. I've even managed humor on rare occasions, but duels are something else. So I've been practicing in Joey the Passion Online duels, and Yu-Gi-Oh! Online duels as much as I can. When Téa gets her chance to shine in future chapters, she'll have a deck that I've SLAVED over to construct. I might even start using it in my other fics, such as Prophecy Girl, just because I've finally constructed something that works! But I'll admit-- Joey's got the right idea in thinking that so much of the game relies on luck. I've had killer decks before, but if you can't get a combo (or worse, break an opponent's combo), you're a dead duck. But the beauty of fanfiction is NOT letting that happen! Bwahah!
And lastly I would like to comment on Seto's recent return to his competitive nature. I realize it was somewhat present in other chapters but it was never as obvious as in the show. That uncompromising drive to win and be the best is a basic part of Seto's character, and while I understand in his relationship to Tea it would lessen to some degree I doubt it would ever truely disappear. Winning duels has always been of extreme importance to him, its nice to see him get back in the game. Though why he would hid this from Tea, only you know.
That being said...Excellent work once again. I greatly look forward to seeing how your plot lines will shape and change the story of the movie. If you were writing the actual show I would tune in every day. Until next time.
Sincerely,
THE UNKNOWN REVIEWER
p.s. - upon completion of this story I will unveil my secret identity, lol
I hope you really will tell me who you are, because I have to admit, I'm insanely curious! But to backtrack a little, I thought I was crazy for trying to tie the movie into WDKY, but when I realized how well it could work with my other subplots, I couldn't resist. So while much of it may seem re-hashed to those that have seen the movie or read the Ani-Manga, I stand by my belief that there is enough to differentiate this "Anubis arc" from the movie Anubis arc. You just have to look carefully! Same goes for Seto. I would never get rid of that integral part of his character to be the best or be #1, but I think he can learn to channel that need/desire into something else. I guess we'll just have to see, ne?
UniChild -- Hm...well...as a fan I have to be really honest with you...
this is probably my least favorite chapter yet simply because the majority of it was completely from the movie and not original from you. I did see the clever changes you made, yes. And this is the exact style I'm using for my fan series in progress.
However the whole movie thing just doesn't seem to fit in with how your story's going already.
I suppose it's a matter of perspective. I knew going into this that some people would know the plot already and groan, but I am firm that because of:
a) Seto and Téa being romantically involved
b) Serenity, Duke, Malik, and Bakura being present
c) Mai's influence on Téa
d) My version of Anubis' "origins"
e) Dartz'/his lackies' presence
will change things significantly. Hopefully this'll be more apparent in Chapter 23 and 24, the last two chapters of the Anubis arc. This arc actually plays a big role in the NEXT arc, so please don't brush it off entirely!
You see, when I read WDKY, my mind is able to get so creative with the mood and the all the original adventures you put in it. And that's mostly why I like it along with your amazing writing skills.
But when you took the movie and basically made it your whole chapter...my creativity was limited because I practically have the movie memorized and I found it harder think outside the box. You get what I'm saying?
I found myself just scrolling right through about a third of the chapter simply because I already knew what was was happening. I was a bit dissapointed because I like being suprised. Hope you can understand.
I know it's too late to change anything now, so I hope you can get this part to go somewhere interesting.
And don't take this personally, btw.
I was just a little bummed about the story line taking such a sudden turn.
Keep up the good work though~
The funny thing is, I never feel like I was writing anything particularly "original." The idea of Kaiba vs. Yuugi is pretty old in any size, shape, or form. Téa angsting over a relationship with Seto Kaiba is something that has been done in many Azureshipping stories (and in fact, SHOULD be, just because a relationship with him would NEVER come easy). The Big Five arc was due to my twisting the Noah arc around in WDKY (I started writing WDKY before the Noah's arc completed on KidsWB) and needing to tie everything together. So in reality, there's not a whole lot that WDKY has done that hasn't been done, SOMEHOW, SOMEWHERE, before.
Am I being humble or self-deprecating by saying this? I feel like it's true. I love the plots that the show puts forth, and since I screwed with the time line so much, I figured I had to include the challenges and events that helped shape the characters up until what we know as the end of the show. What makes it a fanfiction and not a novelization of the movie/show is the fact that I've changed what others might consider minor details. They don't seem vastly important in the grand scale of things, but if you focus on them (as I am with Seto and Téa), they become critical to the plot's outcome. You have to look carefully, and read between the lines to truly understand what I'm after in using this plot. I'm not here to bore you, honest!
If you really scroll through so much of the chapter, you will miss out on important details, I guarantee it. I hope Chapter 23 changes your mind about this arc.
Yesenia Rivera -- Whoa! did my favorite authoress just update well yes she did!!
I should say that it took you long enough, but... well... at least you updated your story. This chapter really had a lot of plot from Yu-Gi-Oh! in it. I liked this chapter it was nice.
Never Ever!! take this long to update. Everyday when I saw that you didn't update I felt like I wanted to kill you but not anymore
because you have updated. I didn't think that Isis/Ishizu was really the Supreme General of the Egyptian Councii of Antiquities from the beginning but anyways...this chapter did have a lot of action and excitement, and no I honestly don't know how this story is going to end.
As I've pointed out before, it's true that I'm using elements from the movie and the Yu-Gi-Oh series, but that's because WDKY takes place between seasons-- not after the series is completed. As a result, I can't just let those plot holes hang open; I have to resolve them, keeping in mind the universe I've already shaped for WDKY.
I can't promise how long it'll be between updates though-- I will not post without my chapter getting beta-read and edited, and that might take a while, because I need to find people who are already familiar with the story, who have a decent grasp of English and grammar, and who know the characters. They also have real lives too (as do I...), so I wait until they have free time. :)
As for Isis, in the manga, they actually did call her the Supreme General of the Egyptian Council of Antiquities. Not so in the anime, probably because little kids would have thought Isis was some sort of military leader. That's not what the title means, but that IS the real title...
I just found out from your review replies at live journal that you're going to be making a sequel named CIRCLE OF SEVEN and that it's going to be about the amount of chapter that this story and well I hope it turns out to be a success.
Anyways...I'm glad that the Blue Eyes and Apricots has been accepted by the Anime Fanlistings Network as the official fanlisting of the SetoxAnzu/Tea pairing hope you keep doing a good job!:):):):]:]:]
Hope you update much more faster and luved this chapter keep up with the good work.
Sincerely,
your #1 fan
Yesenia Rivera
Thanks again for reviewing, and for the congrats on BEA! I hope you continue to enjoy this arc, and the rest of the story to come!
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janimelee -- Honey, you rock. I'll be honest, I did not expect you to put the movie in here. The way you had brought Malik in and with Dartz looming in the backgroud, I thought that you were going to skip the movie. Alas, I was wrong and I am glad that I was.
Very good on how you have Dartz's lackeies snooping around at the museum. Makes you wonder what they were doing before the Doom Arc began.
I cannot wait to see your re-telling of the YGO movie. And with the twists you've already put in, I have no doubt that it will be amazing.
I hope you enjoyed it! (You beta'd the most recent chapter, but I hope you still review anyway!) The arc's not over yet, and I hope that things will remain unexpected, especially in the last chapter of the arc (24). I also like to tie everything together, and it's within the last two chapters of the arc that you'll really understand why I wanted to include the movie. :D I'm sneaky! Hopefully you'll continue to (beta?) read and review! Thanks again!
DarkShadowFlame -- Arrgh. The website accused me of spamming last time I tried to review. I lost everything I'd written (and it was so brilliant, too). So, being as tenacious as I am, I will attempt to retype the general concepts, starting by noting that the first review began with the same word: Argh. Argh because of that accursed movie! It went a long way toward refining my images of the characters though. I got so angry with Seto. I cheered aloud when Tea performed her martial-arts-ish kick in midair and knocked out the two zombies. I thought Tristan and Joey were actually pretty dopey, although no huge surprise there. And for whatever reason, I adored Pegasus. I wanted him to beat Seto so badly... I find Seto's arrogance a lot more annoying than Pegasus's arrogance.
Cheers to that! But I love Seto's snarkiness, and one of my favorite parts of the movie was the banter between Pegasus and Kaiba. Kaiba pissed me off, but as in WDKY, I attributed his bad attitude in the movie to being targeted by Anubis, long before Anubis actually planted the Pyramid of Light among Pegasus' things. If Anubis awakened at the same time Yugi put the puzzle together, he had to be "aware" of the Pharaoh reawakening, right? And probably anyone else from back then, assuming Anubis knew [of] them. I always thought Anubis picked Kaiba for a reason-- after all, how else would he have known to plant the Pyramid of Light card in Pegasus' things, when Pegasus had no intention of ever leaving Duelist Kingdom?
I hope Seto won't be such an utter ass in this version... although I'm not holding my breath, after the way he snapped at Tea AGAIN. Alas, what stringent moral tests are you putting our beloved characters through? ::cough::including Raphael::cough::who is good and sweet and would never ever be a bad guy::tear::
o_o Raphael really has a lot of fans, doesn't he? That always surprises me for some reason. I also wonder- is it a matter of taste to spell it 'Raphael' and not 'Rafael'? I'm never sure which one is right.
Aside from vague memories I don't remember the plot of the movie too well, so it's good that you are going into detail... and also good that you are putting your own spin on the events. I can't wait! Good writing through and through. I enjoyed your account of Yugi's mobbing.(That's another thing: fans are obnoxious and stupid. ;) )
There are so many characters running around everywhere my head is swimming. Malik, Shadi, Bakura, Alister and Valon... I started to type "Amelda" instead of "Alister", got really confused, looked it up, only to find a dozen more characters from the Dartz arc that I had forgotten about.
You and me both. I like the name 'Amelda' better, even if it is a bit girly. o_o; Then again, HE looks a bit girly.
Do you have pages upon pages of notes somewhere? I am in awe of the immensely complicated plot you have created, twining characters and events together with your own plotlines, creating what is practically a living breathing creature already, even though the creature/story has only just turned the halfway point and there are TWO more immensities to come. Do you have time to eat and breathe, by any chance? Wow. Just wow.
You found me out! I actually have a massive planner file, a research and notes file, and a calendar page that keeps track of everything I have to write. Of course, that doesn't automatically generate the prose, so even with all that, writing WDKY is, by no means, easy... ^^;
And I tend to do most of my eating in front of the computer. I breathe when I yell at the computer. ^^;
Well, I will continue to be frustrated at Seto if he continues this stupid path towards dom... let's hope Tea can save the day, again, blah. With Raphael's help. (No, I will never shut up either.) I feel like I have forgotten something crucial but I want to review this before everything I've rewritten goes away again. Update... please, of course. Ciao!
I'm so glad you reviewed again! I hope the plotline continues to keep your attention and that you'll keep reading and reviewing! *grin* I always look forward to your reviews, DSF!
-Bleeding Midnight- -- I must start this review with the phrase that has haunted me since I began chapter 1 of this story, I'M SO INSANELY JEALOUS OF YOUR ABILITY TO WRITE! You're chapter are perfect in length, beginning and ending in such perfect ways. Man, I wish I could be as dedicated as you are, but alas hardly any of my work is completed and I'm sad to say that I don't have much inspiration to write anything lately; but I'm just babbling. Your work just amazes me, the way you keep to the original characters personalities is something I've noticed many writers have trouble with and you seem to handle it so well. I've been hooked to this story since I started reading it a few weeks ago, keep up the fantastic work! I can't wait to see what you have planned for this story.
Wow, I really appreciate the kind review! Sometimes I think I overexert myself with how much I put into this story (remember the chapter that was over 200 pages long? o_o; I'm sorry about that...). I am determined to finish it! I've got many other things in desperate need of revision or finishing, but I want to be proud of at least one thing being completed and a "damn good story" before I jump around again. So my advice for you is to focus on an idea that you really like, and that drives you. Stick with it for as long as you possibly can. Bleed your brain dry of ideas if you have to! Never give up!
And please keep reading and reviewing! :)
mischiefmagnet -- Hmm, I'm pretty sure I saw that Supreme General of Antiquities guy on PBS recently, and he was kinda cool. Though I suppose anyone with a title that extreme had better have enough brains and a big enough personality to live up to it...
And believe you me, I think Isis has SOOOO much potential. I love messing with her character, just because she's so mysterious, but so dedicated-- so kick-ass, but so... ISIS! So you'll be seeing more of her... eventually.
I enjoyed this chapter, mostly because of the clever additions and changes you've made to the plot of the 'Pyramid of Light' movie-- which is, admittedly, not my personal favorite thing. I have high hopes for your interpretation, however, and so far I've not been disappointed. You've got me totally curious as to what involvement the characters who were not present in the film will have, and how the relationship between Seto and Téa will factor in.
Ah, you don't know how much I appreciate this. I had reactions from both ends of the scale: They hated it because of my (sudden) lack of originality, the abrupt "plot twist" and the movie (eeew!), which I always thought was a fun story, with lots of potential (That's my word of the day, apparently). And I also had some people that were just like "SQUEE! Movie!" but they didn't mention the major WDKY plot changes at all. So to hear this from you, an author I admire, respect, and ADORE really makes me happy. :)
As usual, I'm astonished by the quality and sheer volume of your writing. It's always a pleasure, and I can't forsee a time when a new chapter of WDKY won't be worth the wait. That being said...I still hope you'll update sooner, rather than later! Seriously, love the lovely story...
I'm excited now, and want to know what happens next! I even dug out my animanga (or cinemanga or whatever they call it) to review and try to come up with some little theories of my own...with little success, quite frankly. Making alterations to existing plotlines has never been my forté, but when other people throw twists onto things in this manner I'm always like, "That was awesome! Why didn't I think of that?" In other words, go you. :)
I want to know your conspiracy theories! I love those things! Tell, tell! *grin* In any case, thank you for reviewing. I hope you can read the latest chapter, and you keep reading and reviewing (you know I will for your fics)!
ImmortalSoull -- lol, wow, this story is wicked long. not that i minded, but it took me like 16 hours to read...with many many breaks and all...but still...i like that mrik is a nice guy now and is trying to protect them...but i still ont get why tea was upset that kaiba went to go battle yami yugi...lol, i suppose i could be slow...yeah, and also, dont make this story too long...just a suggestion...like, make this problem the last problem or something...its not that i didnt like it, but poor seto and tea. lol...in any case, this story was great, and i cant wait for the next chapter, hopefully kaiba will win the duel he is having now. It would be horrible if he lost his blue eyed white dragons.and hopefully he'll listen to yugi when he comes to warn him. Anyways, awesome job and keep up the great work (lol, sounds like something my teacher would say, hehe).
~Immortal Soul
Ah, I tend to write long chapters. Thus, the story as a whole will be long. I'm sort of sorry for it, but sort of not. I only write what I feel needs to be written, to develop the plot and the characters. I guess we'll see who the truly dedicated are when I get reviews from people at the finish line, hm?
Why was Téa upset at Kaiba when he simulated the battle with Yugi? Simple, she didn't expect it. They were on the road to a deep romance, and Kaiba wanting to duel Yugi again seemed out of left field for Téa. She was hurt that he didn't even tell her -not so much that he wants to duel Yugi again, because as other reviewers have pointed out, Kaiba's need to be #1, to be the best are part of his personality. I wouldn't dare take that away from him. But Téa lacks an understanding of this (completely), and was hoping that Kaiba's new devotion was her. She's still got a pretty fragile ego I'd say, after everything that's happened, and what Kaiba did hurt her. This'll be made more clear in Chapter 23 and 24, so don't think you're slow!
However, I've said multiple times that the story will be 36 chapters long. No more, no less. There is at least one more major arc coming up in the story, possibly more. The Anubis arc will NOT be the last "problem" the gang faces. The story will also have 2 sequels: "Circle of Seven" and "Eternal Dimension."
Thanks for reviewing!
Starian Princess -- Now they've gotten into another fight though.. *sighs* When will these two ever learn? I did notice that it was following the movie's plot but obviously, there are lots of changes too. I can't wait to see the twists that come with the fact that Seto and Tea are together, as well as Bakura and Malik being present to add to the impending chaos as it is. You also write out your dueling very well. Gosh, I'd never imagined romance and dueling could be pulled off so efficiently- perfectly even. Update soon!^^
Bwahahahah! I don't believe in "easy love." I'm also glad that you recognize that the plot is not just a novelization of the movie, but the "big elements" (mostly the presence of other, particular characters) will alter this arc, and WDKY's plot as a whole. There are hints everywhere! So I hope you enjoy all the twists and turns that there are-- and there are more to come!
I also hope I live up to this reputation I'm building for being able to write duels, because I always thought of it as my weakness! It's easy when the duels are already laid out for you in the movie/the Ani-Manga, but when I have to write all-original duels, I'm pretty much pulling from my meager experience. Time to practice more! But Romance + Dueling is definitely something I hope to write more of, so you'll DEFINITELY see more of that in WDKY.
I hope you continue to enjoy the story and review!
Lady Kirei -- Hey there, girl. It's been a long time since I've read this story. Too much time studying! *gets dizzy, takes one long, deep breath* Anyway, I see that you have used lines from the movie almost line for line. *critical expression* But I hope that it fits in the way you want it to for your story. *giggles* Please update soon. *smiles and bows* Bye for now.
Lady Kirei ^_^
Yes, I have used lines from the movie, almost word for word. Why? Because I liked the movie. I liked the plot, I liked the characters, and I liked the idea of it somehow fitting into the WDKY and YGO universes without destroying what had already been set up. The great dialogue is just part of it. Of course, not all the dialogue could work perfectly- after all, Serenity, Malik, Bakura, and Duke are all there, and Anubis didn't just "pop" into existence. The arc explores some of those parts, so don't think WDKY22-24 is a "read along with your Ani-Manga" kind of story arc! I hope you understand. :)
Please keep reading and reviewing, and tell me what you think of this arc once it's done!
I haven't done review replies in a while, and you might think that because I have the ability to use FFnet's new Review Reply option, I would take advantage of it. However, the thing with the FFnet Review Reply is that they are private, not posted anywhere on the site. With these, not only can you see which reviews I took special notice of, but which ones asked pertinent enough questions for me to answer. As always, keep your eyes peeled for interesting information or secret spoilers!
Note: I do not post all reviews that I receive here; only the ones that I feel I should reply to. For all reviews, I do NOT edit them for content/spelling/etc. in any way.
For lengthier reviews, I will insert my commentary where appropriate. The actual review will resume in italicized text.
If more reviews come in for this (or any older) chapter(s), then I will respond to them at the BOTTOM of this page, and indicate a “last updated” section here at the TOP. If there is no LAST UPDATED area, that means this post has not changed since the original post date.
Nachzes Black-Rider -- Meh.
^^ The only thing I really liked about the YGO movie was the close-ups of Seto's leather-clad legs, and the fact that IF Anubis hadn't come out, he would've trounced Yuugi's sorry ass.
*grin* I found it pretty amusing myself, and it is certainly allowing for me to set the stage for the subplot that I've been waiting to write ever since Chapter 10 or so. The devil (or God?) is in the details, so don't brush off this whole arc just because it's based off the movie! Believe you me, there are VERY important points getting mentioned in this 3-chapter arc! (It finishes with Ch. 24.)
But yeah, you're right-- I always thought Kaiba would have totally won this one, if 'Anubis' hadn't showed up. :P
gladdecease -- Yay for new chappie! Loved the adding in of the movie plotline...and I sort of hope you eventually have the moment that no proper movie-goer could forget. Téa split-kicking the heads off some zombie mummies! XD *loved that part*
Also...
'The same puzzle whom many believe possessed your Millennium Puzzle...'
Perhaps "pharaoh" instead of that first puzzle? The sentence doesn't quite make sense otherwise.
Excellent chapter, once again!
Ahaha, thanks for catching that error! I fixed it. :) I also loved certain scenes in the movie --especially some of Téa's ass-kicking moments, her snarkastic wit, and of course, the banter between Kaiba and Pegasus. Hence, I had a strong motivation to put them (in context) into the WDKY world.
I hope you enjoy this arc and the rest of the story to come!
unknown reviewer -- Before I begin to review this chapter I would like to make something known. I don't really read fan-fiction anymore. I look in any section I'm interested in and all I find that thewritting is rarely middle school level, the characters are not well portrayed, few bother with details unless describing their over the top OC.
But this story...This is something else. I can't stress enough how good you really are. Your clever plot twists, the cliffhangers, the descriptions, and above all the characters make this truely the best fic on the site that I have seen. You characters are far superior to what is on the show. Tea is usually a one trick pony who's no more than a cheerleader, while Seto is the standard rival character with a sympathetic past. You have breathed life in these characters and made them people.
WOW! Thank you very much for the high praise-- I'm glad to know my efforts are not wasted! I know some people get irritated with how detailed I make the story, with all its subplots. Unlike many fics, I really try to develop the characters and situations. I suppose it's my way of injecting "realism" into an otherwise unrealistic universe-- what with magic, monsters, reincarnation, and other things. Then again, who's to say that just because we don't see it on our world, it doesn't exist? ^_~
Now enough rambling about you...It's time to ramble about the chapter.
I saw the YGO Movie on TV so much of the middle was old to me plot wise. However by showing the thoughts that run through the minds of the characters durring these scenes we are able to gain new insights as to whats going on, nicely done. Well done but I hope future chapters take more advantage of the new events...such as the presence of Dartz's gang, Malik and Bakura, oh and Seto and Tea.
I was also glad to see some actual dueling. I rarely ever see decent duels in stories so I welcomed this, despite the fact that movie watchers already knew what was going on move for move. I look forward to some origional duels.
Duels are probably my weak point when it comes to Yu-Gi-Oh fics. I've even managed humor on rare occasions, but duels are something else. So I've been practicing in Joey the Passion Online duels, and Yu-Gi-Oh! Online duels as much as I can. When Téa gets her chance to shine in future chapters, she'll have a deck that I've SLAVED over to construct. I might even start using it in my other fics, such as Prophecy Girl, just because I've finally constructed something that works! But I'll admit-- Joey's got the right idea in thinking that so much of the game relies on luck. I've had killer decks before, but if you can't get a combo (or worse, break an opponent's combo), you're a dead duck. But the beauty of fanfiction is NOT letting that happen! Bwahah!
And lastly I would like to comment on Seto's recent return to his competitive nature. I realize it was somewhat present in other chapters but it was never as obvious as in the show. That uncompromising drive to win and be the best is a basic part of Seto's character, and while I understand in his relationship to Tea it would lessen to some degree I doubt it would ever truely disappear. Winning duels has always been of extreme importance to him, its nice to see him get back in the game. Though why he would hid this from Tea, only you know.
That being said...Excellent work once again. I greatly look forward to seeing how your plot lines will shape and change the story of the movie. If you were writing the actual show I would tune in every day. Until next time.
Sincerely,
THE UNKNOWN REVIEWER
p.s. - upon completion of this story I will unveil my secret identity, lol
I hope you really will tell me who you are, because I have to admit, I'm insanely curious! But to backtrack a little, I thought I was crazy for trying to tie the movie into WDKY, but when I realized how well it could work with my other subplots, I couldn't resist. So while much of it may seem re-hashed to those that have seen the movie or read the Ani-Manga, I stand by my belief that there is enough to differentiate this "Anubis arc" from the movie Anubis arc. You just have to look carefully! Same goes for Seto. I would never get rid of that integral part of his character to be the best or be #1, but I think he can learn to channel that need/desire into something else. I guess we'll just have to see, ne?
UniChild -- Hm...well...as a fan I have to be really honest with you...
this is probably my least favorite chapter yet simply because the majority of it was completely from the movie and not original from you. I did see the clever changes you made, yes. And this is the exact style I'm using for my fan series in progress.
However the whole movie thing just doesn't seem to fit in with how your story's going already.
I suppose it's a matter of perspective. I knew going into this that some people would know the plot already and groan, but I am firm that because of:
a) Seto and Téa being romantically involved
b) Serenity, Duke, Malik, and Bakura being present
c) Mai's influence on Téa
d) My version of Anubis' "origins"
e) Dartz'/his lackies' presence
will change things significantly. Hopefully this'll be more apparent in Chapter 23 and 24, the last two chapters of the Anubis arc. This arc actually plays a big role in the NEXT arc, so please don't brush it off entirely!
You see, when I read WDKY, my mind is able to get so creative with the mood and the all the original adventures you put in it. And that's mostly why I like it along with your amazing writing skills.
But when you took the movie and basically made it your whole chapter...my creativity was limited because I practically have the movie memorized and I found it harder think outside the box. You get what I'm saying?
I found myself just scrolling right through about a third of the chapter simply because I already knew what was was happening. I was a bit dissapointed because I like being suprised. Hope you can understand.
I know it's too late to change anything now, so I hope you can get this part to go somewhere interesting.
And don't take this personally, btw.
I was just a little bummed about the story line taking such a sudden turn.
Keep up the good work though~
The funny thing is, I never feel like I was writing anything particularly "original." The idea of Kaiba vs. Yuugi is pretty old in any size, shape, or form. Téa angsting over a relationship with Seto Kaiba is something that has been done in many Azureshipping stories (and in fact, SHOULD be, just because a relationship with him would NEVER come easy). The Big Five arc was due to my twisting the Noah arc around in WDKY (I started writing WDKY before the Noah's arc completed on KidsWB) and needing to tie everything together. So in reality, there's not a whole lot that WDKY has done that hasn't been done, SOMEHOW, SOMEWHERE, before.
Am I being humble or self-deprecating by saying this? I feel like it's true. I love the plots that the show puts forth, and since I screwed with the time line so much, I figured I had to include the challenges and events that helped shape the characters up until what we know as the end of the show. What makes it a fanfiction and not a novelization of the movie/show is the fact that I've changed what others might consider minor details. They don't seem vastly important in the grand scale of things, but if you focus on them (as I am with Seto and Téa), they become critical to the plot's outcome. You have to look carefully, and read between the lines to truly understand what I'm after in using this plot. I'm not here to bore you, honest!
If you really scroll through so much of the chapter, you will miss out on important details, I guarantee it. I hope Chapter 23 changes your mind about this arc.
Yesenia Rivera -- Whoa! did my favorite authoress just update well yes she did!!
I should say that it took you long enough, but... well... at least you updated your story. This chapter really had a lot of plot from Yu-Gi-Oh! in it. I liked this chapter it was nice.
Never Ever!! take this long to update. Everyday when I saw that you didn't update I felt like I wanted to kill you but not anymore
because you have updated. I didn't think that Isis/Ishizu was really the Supreme General of the Egyptian Councii of Antiquities from the beginning but anyways...this chapter did have a lot of action and excitement, and no I honestly don't know how this story is going to end.
As I've pointed out before, it's true that I'm using elements from the movie and the Yu-Gi-Oh series, but that's because WDKY takes place between seasons-- not after the series is completed. As a result, I can't just let those plot holes hang open; I have to resolve them, keeping in mind the universe I've already shaped for WDKY.
I can't promise how long it'll be between updates though-- I will not post without my chapter getting beta-read and edited, and that might take a while, because I need to find people who are already familiar with the story, who have a decent grasp of English and grammar, and who know the characters. They also have real lives too (as do I...), so I wait until they have free time. :)
As for Isis, in the manga, they actually did call her the Supreme General of the Egyptian Council of Antiquities. Not so in the anime, probably because little kids would have thought Isis was some sort of military leader. That's not what the title means, but that IS the real title...
I just found out from your review replies at live journal that you're going to be making a sequel named CIRCLE OF SEVEN and that it's going to be about the amount of chapter that this story and well I hope it turns out to be a success.
Anyways...I'm glad that the Blue Eyes and Apricots has been accepted by the Anime Fanlistings Network as the official fanlisting of the SetoxAnzu/Tea pairing hope you keep doing a good job!:):):):]:]:]
Hope you update much more faster and luved this chapter keep up with the good work.
Sincerely,
your #1 fan
Yesenia Rivera
Thanks again for reviewing, and for the congrats on BEA! I hope you continue to enjoy this arc, and the rest of the story to come!
janimelee -- Honey, you rock. I'll be honest, I did not expect you to put the movie in here. The way you had brought Malik in and with Dartz looming in the backgroud, I thought that you were going to skip the movie. Alas, I was wrong and I am glad that I was.Very good on how you have Dartz's lackeies snooping around at the museum. Makes you wonder what they were doing before the Doom Arc began.
I cannot wait to see your re-telling of the YGO movie. And with the twists you've already put in, I have no doubt that it will be amazing.
I hope you enjoyed it! (You beta'd the most recent chapter, but I hope you still review anyway!) The arc's not over yet, and I hope that things will remain unexpected, especially in the last chapter of the arc (24). I also like to tie everything together, and it's within the last two chapters of the arc that you'll really understand why I wanted to include the movie. :D I'm sneaky! Hopefully you'll continue to (beta?) read and review! Thanks again!
DarkShadowFlame -- Arrgh. The website accused me of spamming last time I tried to review. I lost everything I'd written (and it was so brilliant, too). So, being as tenacious as I am, I will attempt to retype the general concepts, starting by noting that the first review began with the same word: Argh. Argh because of that accursed movie! It went a long way toward refining my images of the characters though. I got so angry with Seto. I cheered aloud when Tea performed her martial-arts-ish kick in midair and knocked out the two zombies. I thought Tristan and Joey were actually pretty dopey, although no huge surprise there. And for whatever reason, I adored Pegasus. I wanted him to beat Seto so badly... I find Seto's arrogance a lot more annoying than Pegasus's arrogance.
Cheers to that! But I love Seto's snarkiness, and one of my favorite parts of the movie was the banter between Pegasus and Kaiba. Kaiba pissed me off, but as in WDKY, I attributed his bad attitude in the movie to being targeted by Anubis, long before Anubis actually planted the Pyramid of Light among Pegasus' things. If Anubis awakened at the same time Yugi put the puzzle together, he had to be "aware" of the Pharaoh reawakening, right? And probably anyone else from back then, assuming Anubis knew [of] them. I always thought Anubis picked Kaiba for a reason-- after all, how else would he have known to plant the Pyramid of Light card in Pegasus' things, when Pegasus had no intention of ever leaving Duelist Kingdom?
I hope Seto won't be such an utter ass in this version... although I'm not holding my breath, after the way he snapped at Tea AGAIN. Alas, what stringent moral tests are you putting our beloved characters through? ::cough::including Raphael::cough::who is good and sweet and would never ever be a bad guy::tear::
o_o Raphael really has a lot of fans, doesn't he? That always surprises me for some reason. I also wonder- is it a matter of taste to spell it 'Raphael' and not 'Rafael'? I'm never sure which one is right.
Aside from vague memories I don't remember the plot of the movie too well, so it's good that you are going into detail... and also good that you are putting your own spin on the events. I can't wait! Good writing through and through. I enjoyed your account of Yugi's mobbing.(That's another thing: fans are obnoxious and stupid. ;) )
There are so many characters running around everywhere my head is swimming. Malik, Shadi, Bakura, Alister and Valon... I started to type "Amelda" instead of "Alister", got really confused, looked it up, only to find a dozen more characters from the Dartz arc that I had forgotten about.
You and me both. I like the name 'Amelda' better, even if it is a bit girly. o_o; Then again, HE looks a bit girly.
Do you have pages upon pages of notes somewhere? I am in awe of the immensely complicated plot you have created, twining characters and events together with your own plotlines, creating what is practically a living breathing creature already, even though the creature/story has only just turned the halfway point and there are TWO more immensities to come. Do you have time to eat and breathe, by any chance? Wow. Just wow.
You found me out! I actually have a massive planner file, a research and notes file, and a calendar page that keeps track of everything I have to write. Of course, that doesn't automatically generate the prose, so even with all that, writing WDKY is, by no means, easy... ^^;
And I tend to do most of my eating in front of the computer. I breathe when I yell at the computer. ^^;
Well, I will continue to be frustrated at Seto if he continues this stupid path towards dom... let's hope Tea can save the day, again, blah. With Raphael's help. (No, I will never shut up either.) I feel like I have forgotten something crucial but I want to review this before everything I've rewritten goes away again. Update... please, of course. Ciao!
I'm so glad you reviewed again! I hope the plotline continues to keep your attention and that you'll keep reading and reviewing! *grin* I always look forward to your reviews, DSF!
-Bleeding Midnight- -- I must start this review with the phrase that has haunted me since I began chapter 1 of this story, I'M SO INSANELY JEALOUS OF YOUR ABILITY TO WRITE! You're chapter are perfect in length, beginning and ending in such perfect ways. Man, I wish I could be as dedicated as you are, but alas hardly any of my work is completed and I'm sad to say that I don't have much inspiration to write anything lately; but I'm just babbling. Your work just amazes me, the way you keep to the original characters personalities is something I've noticed many writers have trouble with and you seem to handle it so well. I've been hooked to this story since I started reading it a few weeks ago, keep up the fantastic work! I can't wait to see what you have planned for this story.
Wow, I really appreciate the kind review! Sometimes I think I overexert myself with how much I put into this story (remember the chapter that was over 200 pages long? o_o; I'm sorry about that...). I am determined to finish it! I've got many other things in desperate need of revision or finishing, but I want to be proud of at least one thing being completed and a "damn good story" before I jump around again. So my advice for you is to focus on an idea that you really like, and that drives you. Stick with it for as long as you possibly can. Bleed your brain dry of ideas if you have to! Never give up!
And please keep reading and reviewing! :)
mischiefmagnet -- Hmm, I'm pretty sure I saw that Supreme General of Antiquities guy on PBS recently, and he was kinda cool. Though I suppose anyone with a title that extreme had better have enough brains and a big enough personality to live up to it... And believe you me, I think Isis has SOOOO much potential. I love messing with her character, just because she's so mysterious, but so dedicated-- so kick-ass, but so... ISIS! So you'll be seeing more of her... eventually.
I enjoyed this chapter, mostly because of the clever additions and changes you've made to the plot of the 'Pyramid of Light' movie-- which is, admittedly, not my personal favorite thing. I have high hopes for your interpretation, however, and so far I've not been disappointed. You've got me totally curious as to what involvement the characters who were not present in the film will have, and how the relationship between Seto and Téa will factor in.
Ah, you don't know how much I appreciate this. I had reactions from both ends of the scale: They hated it because of my (sudden) lack of originality, the abrupt "plot twist" and the movie (eeew!), which I always thought was a fun story, with lots of potential (That's my word of the day, apparently). And I also had some people that were just like "SQUEE! Movie!" but they didn't mention the major WDKY plot changes at all. So to hear this from you, an author I admire, respect, and ADORE really makes me happy. :)
As usual, I'm astonished by the quality and sheer volume of your writing. It's always a pleasure, and I can't forsee a time when a new chapter of WDKY won't be worth the wait. That being said...I still hope you'll update sooner, rather than later! Seriously, love the lovely story...
I'm excited now, and want to know what happens next! I even dug out my animanga (or cinemanga or whatever they call it) to review and try to come up with some little theories of my own...with little success, quite frankly. Making alterations to existing plotlines has never been my forté, but when other people throw twists onto things in this manner I'm always like, "That was awesome! Why didn't I think of that?" In other words, go you. :)
I want to know your conspiracy theories! I love those things! Tell, tell! *grin* In any case, thank you for reviewing. I hope you can read the latest chapter, and you keep reading and reviewing (you know I will for your fics)!
ImmortalSoull -- lol, wow, this story is wicked long. not that i minded, but it took me like 16 hours to read...with many many breaks and all...but still...i like that mrik is a nice guy now and is trying to protect them...but i still ont get why tea was upset that kaiba went to go battle yami yugi...lol, i suppose i could be slow...yeah, and also, dont make this story too long...just a suggestion...like, make this problem the last problem or something...its not that i didnt like it, but poor seto and tea. lol...in any case, this story was great, and i cant wait for the next chapter, hopefully kaiba will win the duel he is having now. It would be horrible if he lost his blue eyed white dragons.and hopefully he'll listen to yugi when he comes to warn him. Anyways, awesome job and keep up the great work (lol, sounds like something my teacher would say, hehe).
~Immortal Soul
Ah, I tend to write long chapters. Thus, the story as a whole will be long. I'm sort of sorry for it, but sort of not. I only write what I feel needs to be written, to develop the plot and the characters. I guess we'll see who the truly dedicated are when I get reviews from people at the finish line, hm?
Why was Téa upset at Kaiba when he simulated the battle with Yugi? Simple, she didn't expect it. They were on the road to a deep romance, and Kaiba wanting to duel Yugi again seemed out of left field for Téa. She was hurt that he didn't even tell her -not so much that he wants to duel Yugi again, because as other reviewers have pointed out, Kaiba's need to be #1, to be the best are part of his personality. I wouldn't dare take that away from him. But Téa lacks an understanding of this (completely), and was hoping that Kaiba's new devotion was her. She's still got a pretty fragile ego I'd say, after everything that's happened, and what Kaiba did hurt her. This'll be made more clear in Chapter 23 and 24, so don't think you're slow!
However, I've said multiple times that the story will be 36 chapters long. No more, no less. There is at least one more major arc coming up in the story, possibly more. The Anubis arc will NOT be the last "problem" the gang faces. The story will also have 2 sequels: "Circle of Seven" and "Eternal Dimension."
Thanks for reviewing!
Starian Princess -- Now they've gotten into another fight though.. *sighs* When will these two ever learn? I did notice that it was following the movie's plot but obviously, there are lots of changes too. I can't wait to see the twists that come with the fact that Seto and Tea are together, as well as Bakura and Malik being present to add to the impending chaos as it is. You also write out your dueling very well. Gosh, I'd never imagined romance and dueling could be pulled off so efficiently- perfectly even. Update soon!^^
Bwahahahah! I don't believe in "easy love." I'm also glad that you recognize that the plot is not just a novelization of the movie, but the "big elements" (mostly the presence of other, particular characters) will alter this arc, and WDKY's plot as a whole. There are hints everywhere! So I hope you enjoy all the twists and turns that there are-- and there are more to come!
I also hope I live up to this reputation I'm building for being able to write duels, because I always thought of it as my weakness! It's easy when the duels are already laid out for you in the movie/the Ani-Manga, but when I have to write all-original duels, I'm pretty much pulling from my meager experience. Time to practice more! But Romance + Dueling is definitely something I hope to write more of, so you'll DEFINITELY see more of that in WDKY.
I hope you continue to enjoy the story and review!
Lady Kirei -- Hey there, girl. It's been a long time since I've read this story. Too much time studying! *gets dizzy, takes one long, deep breath* Anyway, I see that you have used lines from the movie almost line for line. *critical expression* But I hope that it fits in the way you want it to for your story. *giggles* Please update soon. *smiles and bows* Bye for now.
Lady Kirei ^_^
Yes, I have used lines from the movie, almost word for word. Why? Because I liked the movie. I liked the plot, I liked the characters, and I liked the idea of it somehow fitting into the WDKY and YGO universes without destroying what had already been set up. The great dialogue is just part of it. Of course, not all the dialogue could work perfectly- after all, Serenity, Malik, Bakura, and Duke are all there, and Anubis didn't just "pop" into existence. The arc explores some of those parts, so don't think WDKY22-24 is a "read along with your Ani-Manga" kind of story arc! I hope you understand. :)
Please keep reading and reviewing, and tell me what you think of this arc once it's done!
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Ahhh! ok. ^_^
Date: 2006-03-05 08:10 pm (UTC)I see what you're saying. Maybe it's my stubborness to accept change that caused me to write a review like that, but since you explained it I understand better. I read chapter 23 and I actually kinda like what you're doing now. Makes more sense. And even though it may not be completely original, might as well tell you that your story's literally my favorite fanfic in the world. ^_~
(hehe, no pressure :p~)
Re: Ahhh! ok. ^_^
Date: 2006-03-06 04:04 am (UTC)As it turns out, 24 is going to have some serious tweaks to the movie, because I've found some major plot holes that need fixing.