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Feb. 10th, 2004 07:20 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
azuriteOkay, so it's a little better. My hearing is somewhat shot, still, which sucks, since I listen to music while I'm online and working on fics. And, wanting to work on WDKY9 required me to go back and check for all the revisions I needed to make, so I'm logging them here, as I make them...
(3) - Revised a few sentences where the grammar was wrong; added a bit more description where Tea and Joey's tuition was concerned. Also revised the part where Tea was touring the house; created a mini blueprint of the top floor of the Kaiba mansion, including all the bedrooms. Noted important dates (Aug 8, Aug 16, Aug 24) and ages (Mokuba is 10 and 1 month by Chapter 4; this means during Duelist Kingdom and Battle City, he was 9 or so years old.) I worry about the overall ages of the characters; I'm not sure whether this holds true for all Japanese students, but since their school year differs from the "standard" one (Aug/Sept-Jun), I'm letting the fact that several charas. will be 19 by their 3rd year of HS.'
References made:
* Tea's one precious belonging is that of her mother's sapphire necklace
* Battle City is considered the point when Tea really got to know Mokuba; we're saying it occured in Summer (Jun-Jul)
* This means that Tea & Co. were in 2nd year HS by April of that same year; Duelist Kingdom had to be BEFORE THAT (or towards the end of the 1st year, in March or so).
(4) - Revised unclear pronoun usage ("he" to "Mokuba," etc.) and fixed a few other grammar mistakes.
--> I'm going to upload these fixes tomorrow. I want to make sure I didn't miss anything. Chapters 5-6 have the most edits; ones I found long before tonight, and they also include a lot of references. I'll probably try and revise the Official WDKY page with this Changelog, and maybe add a few (n)Faq to the Interview section about what the references might lead up to. :)
X_X I'm actually tired. How surprising! Well, rest is supposed to be good, so I'm going to type a bit more of WDKY9 and then jet to sleep.
(3) - Revised a few sentences where the grammar was wrong; added a bit more description where Tea and Joey's tuition was concerned. Also revised the part where Tea was touring the house; created a mini blueprint of the top floor of the Kaiba mansion, including all the bedrooms. Noted important dates (Aug 8, Aug 16, Aug 24) and ages (Mokuba is 10 and 1 month by Chapter 4; this means during Duelist Kingdom and Battle City, he was 9 or so years old.) I worry about the overall ages of the characters; I'm not sure whether this holds true for all Japanese students, but since their school year differs from the "standard" one (Aug/Sept-Jun), I'm letting the fact that several charas. will be 19 by their 3rd year of HS.'
References made:
* Tea's one precious belonging is that of her mother's sapphire necklace
* Battle City is considered the point when Tea really got to know Mokuba; we're saying it occured in Summer (Jun-Jul)
* This means that Tea & Co. were in 2nd year HS by April of that same year; Duelist Kingdom had to be BEFORE THAT (or towards the end of the 1st year, in March or so).
(4) - Revised unclear pronoun usage ("he" to "Mokuba," etc.) and fixed a few other grammar mistakes.
--> I'm going to upload these fixes tomorrow. I want to make sure I didn't miss anything. Chapters 5-6 have the most edits; ones I found long before tonight, and they also include a lot of references. I'll probably try and revise the Official WDKY page with this Changelog, and maybe add a few (n)Faq to the Interview section about what the references might lead up to. :)
X_X I'm actually tired. How surprising! Well, rest is supposed to be good, so I'm going to type a bit more of WDKY9 and then jet to sleep.
